Awesome - thanks for acquiring it! I'd be happy to weigh in anywhere you need a second opinion, as long as you're going to take the lead on it.

The good news is that Seazer's lyrics tend to be light on basic grammar. Or any grammar at all. Half the time they're just lists of bizarre phrases, and it's up to you to figure out what he's getting at.

...On second thought, that may not actually be good news for a translator. But either way, godspeed!

My CD arrived today!! Unfortunately, it does not include the extra verse to Zettai Unmei Mokushiroku, but it does have another verse to Wakaba's duel song! Other than that, the lyrics to the duel songs are the same, except some have slight differences in kanji, which is interesting.
There isn't anything from the Rose Egg Sophia CD; I just thought there was because one of them had crescent moon in the title, but it's a different song, so don't expect any of that material. Still! Another verse to Wakaba's duel song is great.
There are several non-Utena songs as well.
I don't have anything scanned or translated yet but I want to let you all know I have it and this is what it's like.

Ahh that sounds so interesting, I'd love to know what the second verse to Magic Lantern Butterfly Moth is (partly because it references the Illiad/Epic Cycle, which I am almost as enthusiastic about as I am with SKU). Which of the other duel songs are on the CD?

The CD is the one at http://www.asian-crack.com/BIAC-006.html; I got the link from the banyu inryoku website. Unfortunately, this site doesn't ship to the U.S., and I couldn't find it on any site that does, so I got it through the shopping service http://myfavoritethingsjapan.com/. They only charge an 8 dollar fee, but with shipping and whatnot the total cost was 50 USD (the price of the CD is around 30).
I can do a quick tracklist in English.
1. Prologue [this is an instrumental]
2. Spira Mirabilis Theatre (Banyu Inryoku version)
3. Paleozoic within the Body (Banyu Inryoku version)
4. Crescent Moon Transmigration
5. Inhuman Illusory Soul Fusion Technique (Banyu Inryoku version)
6. Magical Lantern Butterfly Moth Sixteenth Century (Banyu Inryoku version)
7. Girls' Collection [少女コレクション]
8. W's Prophecy (Banyu Inryoku version)
9. I, I, I [it's basically just the word watashi sung over and over so that should be easy to translate, at least)
10. Angel Creation Namely Light (Banyu Inryoku version)
11. No One Talks About It (Banyu Inryoku version)
12. LastEvolution (Banyu Inryoku version) [this one is actually written out in English with no space like that)
13. Absolute Destiny Apocalypse (Banyu Inryoku version)
14. Seal Spell (Banyu Inryoku version)
15. Kaspar・Shangri La [note: this is literally a reference to Shangri-La, written out シャングリラ, not the phrase figuratively translated as Shangri-La in ZUM]
16. Pestilence Rescuscitation・Body Composition Extract
17. Dark Overture [instrumental]
18: Come Darkness: The Great Destruction
...I don't want to be pedantic, but I believe Magic Lantern Butterfly Moth 16th Century is referencing the Aeniad, not the Iliad. Or is Pyrrhus (son of Priam, not the other Pyrrhus) mentioned in the Iliad too?

Oh, yeah, I agree then, I was just thrown off by the title. Especially since it's from a play based on Hamlet--Pyrrhus and Priam are referenced in Hamlet.
I do think W's Prophecy/Prophecy of W was probably the original title; it's called that on the Angel Creation Namely Light CD too. (That one's great bc it has actually been released w/ the insert book in English, & it has cool info on the plays the songs came from, and it's actually cheap!).
I've got a draft of the translation of the new verse to Wakaba's duel song, so I can probably post it tomorrow. I'm also working on Shoujo Collection because that one doesn't have much kanji, so it's the easiest...

At Times, Love Is wrote:

If there's anything inaccurate in that version, please let me know because I am really Not Fluent. I think it's important to talk about poetic choices if you're likely to make errors so that people can tell the difference.

I'm not exactly fluent either when it comes to this kind of language, but it looks reasonable to me. As poetic choices go, I like your "Lo!" and "flesh made hollow." I would probably go with "torn from limb to limb" rather than "minced," because the former is a well-established English phrase.

Thanks for your efforts!

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Added track 7 to the Google doc.  There's one katakana term I can't figure out (ティアナ), so I would appreciate any help on that.
Translating フアム・アン・ファン as femme enfant might be counterintuitive, but I did find it written out with those katakana in writing about surrealism, and it's definitely a phrase Seazer would be familiar with because Shuji Terayama wrote about it.
I think the title is a reference to something by Tatsuhiko Shibusawa, but I haven't looked into it extensively.

Crescent Moon Transmigration is going slowly, but as for "Shoujo Collection" being a Tatsuhiko Shibusawa reference--yeah. Quite possibly the whole song is and the more I read about this guy the more I wonder how many Seazer songs that could be said about... anyway, found the book at https://www.amazon.co.jp/%E5%B0%91%E5%A … 4122012007.
I'm not buying it anytime soon (it's super cheap, but I already bought one of this guy's essay books and that's enough to last me a long time), but I suspect the answer about Teana will be in there somewhere. I also want to note that Lolita and L'Eve Future are both listed as things people frequently buy with this book, along with a Sleeping Beauty adaptation (or translation, not sure) by this person.
Also, I know there are people trying to get more information about Tatsuhiko Shibusawa's works onto the Internet, so hopefully that means some answers will be easier to find in the future than they are now. (I read there are plans to try to get all of his works online... by 2036).

Yep, it is! Watashi Watashi Watashi (the one I don't need to translate because the lyrics are just one word) is too.
Tatsuhiko Shibusawa seems to be a huge influence. I bought one of his books because it was the only lead I could find on the term クシュムデュメー from A Solitary Life History in a Petite Universe (from the Rose Egg Sophia CD), and it is full of very specific things that were mentioned in duel songs. (As for the term, I know it refers to a historical pair of conjoined twins known as the Scottish brothers, and apparently the name comes from their having two heads, four arms, and one pelvis--but the book doesn't seem to say what language it's from).