This is a static copy of In the Rose Garden, which existed as the center of the western Utena fandom for years. Enjoy. :)

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The Utena Scenario Book - an early draft of the movie script

This is the Utena Movie "Scenario Book" by scriptwriter Yoji ENOKIDO. It's basically an earlier draft of the movie script, with a little bit of concept art added in for the benefit of the eager fans. The main script is in four sections. There's also an introduction and postface by Enokido, and a few excerpts from what I believe is the final script in the back.

I debated whether to post sections of this as I translated them, or whether to wait until it was entirely done. In the end, I decided that posting it in sections would give me more of an incentive to work on it. (It's not hard material to translate, it's just a matter of finding the time to sit down and do it.) Sorry to make you wait for the rest!

Thanks to the CPM translation of the movie, from which I drew on liberally for lines that are identical between this draft of the script and the final one. (There are also many identical lines that I translated differently, however.)

I'm retaining the titles and such in their original French, because there's nothing more Utena-ish than random French. emot-wink

Enjoy!

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Re: The Utena Scenario Book - an early draft of the movie script

La version cinématographique "la fillette révolutionnaire UTENA"
L'Apocalypse d'adolescence
Livre de scénario pour
Auteur: Yoji ENOKIDO

Prologue

From spring to summer of '98, we spent day and night repeatedly going over the themes and story of this movie. No, actually, the themes and story had been decided from the very beginning. Rather, the point of discussion was over the expression and production of those ideas. To again give the characters a fresh image, to more clearly express a "girl's revolution", and to have that girl called Utena once more confront her enemies... that movie only slowly approached its final state.

When the planning began to publish this scenario book for "Revolutionary Girl Utena - Adolescence Apocalypse," I was a little nervous. The reason was simple: for this movie, there's no such thing as a "final draft." The straightforward method of dividing labor, where the screenwriters write a script and the director produces it, was no good for the purposes of the Utena movie. I guess we all just have too much energy (laugh).

So, although I'm a little worried about it, we thought we'd open one section of the story development process for the amusement of the public. This book basically consists of the fourth draft of the script, which we call the "preliminary final draft". Additionally, we've included later revisions of some portions of the screenplay and storyboard that were changed afterwards.

Of course, this manuscript is still in the process of being developed into a movie, and I expect that further changes will be made. So, rather than a "scenario book," it might be better to call this a "base scenario book."

Be that as it may, once the script leaves my scriptwriter hands, I too get to just look forward to seeing it as a film in a theater. Being a scriptwriter is a pretty carefree job, isn't it? (laugh)

Uh oh, someone with blond hair is glaring in my direction with exhausted eyes, so for now, I guess I'll talk to you later.

June 1999, Be-Papas Studio

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Chapter 1 Part A
Le premier chapitre Partie A

O  Afternoon. The Dueling Arena.

Touga's Voice: The memories of the rose... Atop the hill, a white castle juts into into the pure blue sky. A white horse is beside the river, drinking. And beside it, "he" stood...

The clash of sword on sword.
Their faces aren't visible, but two young men are fighting.
On each of their breasts is a rose.
And, although her face can't be seen either, a young woman is watching over the duel.

+

Touga: He knew. He could only act according to a predetermined equation. He was for the sake of the world; the world was for the sake of you.

It's Touga Kiryuu's bedroom.
It's dark inside.
Shiori Takatsuki is also there, in the bed.

Shiori: What are you talking about?
Touga: Once upon a time, there was the Rose Prince, who made all the girls of the world into princesses.

+

The dueling arena.
The violent back-and-forth continues, but soon one of the swords scatters one of the roses.

Shiori's Voice: ...so, why am I not a princess?
Touga's Voice: Because the prince's little sister shut him away in a tower.

The boy who won wraps his arm around the girl's waist.
At that moment, a phone begins to ring...

+

Touga: Nobody has seen the prince since.

Touga's hand, picking up the receiver.

Telephone (Akio's Voice): And so, we were wrapped in the darkness called sadness... at the ends of the world.


O  A river, in the past.
(Opening Credits.) In monochrome:

A small boat, bobbing in a raging current.
A single young girl is riding in it.
She's desperately gripping the violently rocking boat.
However, her youthful resistance is ultimately useless, and she's thrown from the boat.
Her strength is already spent, and she sinks towards the bottom of the water - no, of the dark void.

At that moment:
Out of the darkness, something shining rises towards the surface, and begins to illuminate the girl.
Sensing that surprising radiance, the girl dimly opens her closed eyes.
The shining thing is actually "a prince."
The prince catches the girl in his arms.

+

The girl comes to her senses back on the boat.
She sees the prince fly into the sky, riding a white horse.
Before him is a castle.
The tower's bells start to ring...

[Main Title]

O  A panorama of the middle school building.

O  Classroom 2A. During lunch break.
Class has just ended, and the classroom is noisy.
Occasionally we hear a burst of light-hearted laughter.
By the window is Utena Tenjou, wearing a boy's uniform.
There's a group of female students looking at her with great interest.
Utena stands, glancing at the murmuring classroom out of the corner of her eye.
Then:

Wakaba's Voice: Utena Tenjou.

She turns to see Shinohara Wakaba.

Wakaba: So, what do you think of your first day at your new school?
Utena: (smiling) Well, I'm sure I'll enjoy it here if there's a cute girl like you around.
Wakaba: (blushing slightly) Aw...
Utena: I think the two of us will get along.
Wakaba: I'll show you around the school!

They leave together.

Utena: What's your name?
Wakaba: Wakaba Shinohara!

Wakaba looks over her shoulder at the girls remaining in the classroom, and winks. The nuance is 'I did it!"


O  Lunch break. The campus community.

The forms of the students.
And a panorama of the entire school.

E-ko's Voice: Hi, everyone! If you can hear us, then listen up! We're the Ohtori Academy Broadcasting Club duo, E-ko...
F-ko's Voice: ...and F-ko, reporting in...

+

Insert.

E-ko & F-ko: ...with the lunchtime campus broadcast!

In the broadcasting room, two students are sitting across from each other, facing a mike: E-ko and F-ko.
However, we can't see their faces, only the projection of their shadows on the wall.

+

E-ko's Voice: It turned out to be a cool, beautiful day today. If you brought your lunch, you should eat it outside!
F-ko's Voice: You shouldn't try that. You'll be inviting a capricious passing rain.
E-ko's Voice: Wait a minute, the weather report never said anything about that.
F-ko's Voice: The rain in my heart is sure to cloud the sky above.
E-ko's Voice: Did you get dumped again?
F-ko's Voice: Is there something wrong with me!?
E-ko's Voice: Everyone! If you're going to scribble mischief on your sleeping boyfriend's back, make sure he doesn't have swim class the next day!

We see Wakaba, giving Utena a tour of the school.

+

A corridor.

Utena and Wakaba are walking together.

Utena: (a little hesitant) Hey... Over at the high school building...

Before them, we hear the shrill voices of female students.

Utena: What's going on?
Wakaba: Oh, it must be the Fencing Club.

+

The Fencing Club facility.
There's a group of female students looking down at the piste (the court used in fencing) from the second floor corridors, shouting things like "Mickey!" "Juri-sama!" "Prince!" and so on in high-pitched voices.
Standing out among them is Shori, who's shouting "Juri-san!"
Utena and Wakaba also stop alongside the female students, and follow their gaze.

+

Within the piste are the forms of Miki and Juri, wearing protectors and with swords drawn.
At the signal, they thrust with their swords simultaneously.
They deflect each others' attacks: their swordplay is magnificent.
Soon, as though the outcome had been decided, the two politely sheathe their swords and remove their masks.
The girls' cheers swell.
Juri and Miki meet each others' eyes.

Miki: (smiling boldly) I haven't given up yet.
Juri: The piano suits you better.

+

Utena: ...It sure is popular.
Wakaba: Of course, because it's Juri-sempai and Mickey!

On the screen, close-ups of Juri and Miki, as if from a telescope.

Wakaba: ...All the girls call her "the Prince." Perhaps she'll be your rival...

In a corridor across from them is a long-haired male student, Touga Kiryuu.
Utena and Touga meet each others' eyes from a distance.

Wakaba: (oblivious) And the boy is Miki Kaoru. His nickname is "Mickey." He's still a first-year junior high student, but he's a genius who's taking a bunch of college-level classes. He's cute and popular, but they say he can't get a girlfriend because his twin sister interferes... Huh?

Wakaba suddenly realizes that Utena is no longer beside her.

+

O  The sky.
Dark clouds have come.
There's the faint sound of thunder.

+

O  The courtyard. A flower bed of roses.
It's started to shower, and it's getting wet.

O  The landing of a staircase.
Through the glass of a window, we see the rain falling heavily.
Utena is watching it.
Touga is beside her.

Touga: It's really started to come down.
Utena: It'll stop soon. I hear it's a capricious passing rain.
Touga: It's been two years... no, more.
Utena: ...
Touga: Remember our promise to go to the planetarium? We've yet to go.
Utena: Don't misunderstand.
Touga: Misunderstand?
Utena: I'm not who I used to be. I didn't come here chasing you. I'm surprised. That you've come to this academy, too.

The rain continues to fall outside the window.

Touga: ...How come you're dressed like that?
Utena: A prince. I decided after we separated... that I'd try to live with high aspirations.

Touga casually glances at a western-style painting adorning the wall.
Utena takes a look, too.
It shows a castle, and a young girl seen from behind. (We don't know it yet, but the girl is Himemiya Anthy.)
Touga gently touches the left side of the picture frame.
Utena happens to notice that he has a ring on his finger.

Utena: What's that?
Touga: Hmm?
Utena: That ring...
Touga: (smiles broadly)
Utena: (acting tough) I see. You're engaged to someone.
Touga: This led me to this academy.
Utena: ...
Touga: The Seal of the Rose.
Utena: ....of the rose...

O  The school building, and the sky.
The rain, which started suddenly, has now abruptly stopped again.
The blue sky and sun are emerging from behind the clouds.

O  The courtyard. The flower bed of roses.
The flower garden stands at the root of the school building.
There, a row of roses are blooming.
Sunlight strikes the moisture dripping from the petals of the flowers.
Alone, Utena passes through the now puddle-filled courtyard.
She sees the flower garden, and stops walking.

Utena: ...roses.

Utena walks into the garden.
When she does, suddenly the bud of one of the roses slowly begins to open.
Utena watches, enthralled.
Inside the flower, she sees a ring.

Utena: (astonished, taking it) This is...

It's a Rose Seal, just like the one Touga had earlier.

Utena: ...!

Suddenly, Utena senses something and looks up at the school building beside her.
A surprisingly vivid rainbow is arching across the sky.
And... on the roof.
At the place where one end of the rainbow meets, there's a girl.
As soon as Utena notices her, she disappears.

Utena: ...

Utena enters the building.

O  Rooftop - Hanging garden
Utena has climbed to the roof, and sees before her a meadow of roses.
The clouds and rainbow are beautiful, now that the rain is over.
It's like the garden is in the sky.
Utena is dazzled by the overwhelming beauty.
Without thinking, she takes a step into the roses.
Then she walks over to the edge of the hanging garden.
It's the same place she saw the girl earlier.
The fence only comes about up to her knees, and we see that the sharp precipice of the cliff is only a few centimeters away.
Utena peers down over the deadly cliff.
We hear the wind blowing,
At that moment:

A Girl's Voice: Aren't you scared?

A girl's voice comes from behind her.
When she turns around, Himemiya Anthy is standing there.

Utena: ...
Anthy: Aren't you scared, standing there?

As she says this, Anthy moves to stand next to the cliff, just like Utena.

Utena: (looking at the rose garden) These roses are amazing.
Anthy: This is my rose garden.
Utena: Yours?

Anthy, with a slight smile, climbs onto the fence.

Anthy: I'm the chairman's sister, so I get special treatment.
Utena: ...
Anthy: But in reality, it's me that's captive to the roses.

The deadly fall is just one step away, but Anthy seems completely unconcerned as she walks along on top of the fence.
Her skirt rustles in the breeze.
Anthy walks over to Utena on the fence.

Anthy: What did you come to this academy to do?

The two of them gaze at each other.
Anthy sees the ring in Utena's hand.

Anthy: That's...

Anthy, as if losing her balance, falls towards Utena.

Utena: Whoa!

Utena immediately catches her in her arms.
The two are now embracing each other.
Anthy reaches out her hand to grab away the ring, but Utena pulls away from her.

Utena: It's mine! This Seal of the Rose.
Anthy: ! How do you know that name?
Utena: ...

Then:

Saionji: What are you doing?

At the entrance to the rose garden stands a tall boy holding a sheathed katana.

Saionji: What are you doing with the Rose Bride?
Utena: The Rose... Bride?

Saionji, walking directly halfway towards them:

Saionji: Move away from Anthy.

Saionji points the scabbard at Utena.

Saionji: Only authorized persons are allowed here.

At that moment, Saionji's eyes fall on the Rose Seal that Utena's holding.

Saionji: Oh, so you're a Duelist?
Utena: ...Duelist?
Saionji: My apologies. I was under the impression that my opponent today was to be Touga.
Utena: (shaken inside) "Touga..." do you mean Touga Kiryuu?

She sees that Saionji is wearing the same ring.

Utena: What is this ring?
Saionji: What do you mean, what? This Seal of the Rose is proof that you're a Duelist, able to duel for possession of the Rose Bride.
Utena: Duelist? (to Anthy) To win you?
Saionji: You possess the Seal of the Rose, but you really don't know anything at all, do you? Are you not my opponent for today?
Utena: ...

+

Insert. Utena's memory.
Touga is showing her the ring.

Touga: This led me to this academy. The Seal of the Rose.

+

Utena has put on a determined expression.

Anthy: Ah...

Anthy moves to stop her, but Utena slides the Seal of the Rose onto her finger.
The moment she does so, an iron door closes by its own volition, sealing off the roof's elevator.
The roof changes into a dueling arena.

Saionji: Anthy, prepare us.
Anthy: ...

Among the rows of blooming red roses, there's a single green one.
Anthy picks it, and affixes it to Saionji's chest.
Saionji casually kisses Anthy on the check.

Utena: (watching the kiss) ...

Similarly, there's a single white rose.
This time, Anthy affixes it to Utena.

Anthy: The person whose rose is knocked from their chest loses. (suddenly noticing) Do you have a sword?
Utena: Sword?
Anthy: Do you really know anything about the ring? Now's your chance to take it off.
Just then, the school bells resound through the post-rain sky.

Saionji: So you're without a weapon... how lucky.

Saionji draws his katana from its scabbard.

Anthy: Saionji-sama, one isn't permitted to duel without a sword...

Saionji picks up a nearby bamboo broom and throws it at Utena.

Utena: ...
Saionji: Any complaints now?
Anthy: But, is this person really...
Saionji: Shut up. The duel begins when the bells ring. You forget yourself.

Saionji violently pushes Anthy away.
She falls, struck.
Seeing this, Utena becomes angry.

Utena: Don't you hit your girlfriend!
Saionji: Girlfriend? She's the Rose Bride. In other words, since I'm the current winner of the duels, she's my possession!
Utena: Your possession!?
Saionji: Haa!

Saionji comes at Utena all-out, slashing and aiming for her rose.
Utena leaps back, creating some distance.

Saionji: Looks like this will be an easy victory.

Utena steps on the broom section of the bamboo broom she's holding, clearing it off and creating a makeshift wooden sword.

Utena: (with an angry expression) Are you really trading a girl around by duel? Regardless of how she feels?

Saionji pursues Utena, brandishing his sword.
Utena can barely hold him off with the bamboo stick.

Utena: Answer me! Does everyone who owns one of these rings really duel in order to win her?

Anthy's expression.

Saionji: What are you talking about now!?

He cuts through half of Utena's bamboo stick, sending it flying.

Utena: That katana.. is real?
Saionji: (inadvertently holding back with his sword) Her feelings? You don't understand anything! She's the Rose Bride!
Utena: You're the one who doesn't understand anything! Is there any girl who'd be happy to be traded through duels?

Anthy's expression.

Saionji: It's over!

Saionji again swings with his sword.
Utena will surely die.
But then...
Anthy nestles up to Utena, as if to protect her.

Anthy: Saionji-sama... it seems this person really doesn't know anything.
Saionji: Didn't I tell you not to get in the way?

Regardless of the fact that Anthy is there, Saionji moves to strike.

Utena: Watch out!

Utena moves to protect Anthy.
Seizing the opportunity, Saionji's sword goes for Utena's chest.
He misses the rose, but tears through the buttons on Utena's uniform, revealing the swelling beneath.

Saionji: You're... a girl?
Utena: I don't remember saying that I was a boy.

Utena is protecting Anthy.
For a moment, it looks as if their lips are accidentally going to touch...
And in the next moment,

Utena: Huh?
Saionji: !

Anthy suddenly changes from her school uniform to her Rose Bride dress.
(Anthy is surprised herself.)
At the same time, a light begins to crystallize in Anthy's chest...

Saionji: (overawed) What...?
Utena: Taa!

Utena draws that 'sword' from Anthy's chest, and brandishes it with a battle cry.
The sword on Saionji's chest scatters.

O  Tower
The bells ring.


O  Student Council Room - Watchtower
Touga is watching the proceedings using opera glasses.

Touga: Wonderful.

The sounds of a piano float quietly through the air.
Also in the spacious watch tower is a piano, which Miki is playing.
Standing next to the piano is Juri.

Juri: (to Touga) Weren't you supposed to be the one dueling today?
Miki: So there's a Duelist besides those of us in the Student Council... the Ends of the World didn't contact us about it at all. What on earth is he thinking?
Touga: (smiling audaciously) Perhaps he's always watching us from afar. Well, anyone with high aspirations can be chosen as a Duelist.
Miki: A man...
Juri: ...or a woman.
Touga: ...or someone in a coffin.

As he says this, Touga's eye falls on a western-style painting of a castle on the wall of the room. Next to it is the shape of a prince, standing in the darkness.

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#4 | Back to Top09-29-2010 05:00:17 PM

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Re: The Utena Scenario Book - an early draft of the movie script

Damn it Dallbun you are the best! poptart

I always wanted to know what Utena was going to ask Wakaba before being interrupted by the fencing team.

It's funny, I read the movie manga and some of the scenes are quite alike. Specially Anthy noticing Utena's ring.
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Re: The Utena Scenario Book - an early draft of the movie script

Interesting, I'd completely forgotten about the movie manga (even though I own a copy in storage somewhere.) Doesn't it also open with Touga talking to a (Shiori placeholder) girl about the plot? Is the conversation the same?

I wonder when in the development process the manga script started to diverge from the movie one...

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Dallbun wrote:Doesn't it also open with Touga talking to a (Shiori placeholder) girl about the plot?

He is talking... to Utena? emot-confused

Dallbun wrote: I wonder when in the development process the manga script started to diverge from the movie one...

If I had to guess, I would say it diverged when the director thought about the car scene.

And anyway, when Wakaba and Utena meet for the first time, does Wakaba thinks Utena is a boy?
Is that why she ask Utena if Juri was going to be her rival?


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Dallbun honey, you know I love you forever for doing things like this! I'd love to comment on the content but I can't actually read it until I'm not sick anymore. I'm looking forward to it very much though. Thank you!


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Re: The Utena Scenario Book - an early draft of the movie script

Dallbun wrote:

Interesting, I'd completely forgotten about the movie manga (even though I own a copy in storage somewhere.) Doesn't it also open with Touga talking to a (Shiori placeholder) girl about the plot? Is the conversation the same?

While most of Touga's dialog is the same between both this script and the movie manga, the tone of the former seems to be much darker.  The girl he's talking to in the movie manga seems to be a random student he just finished screwing.

Also, I offer you infinite poptarts for your efforts on translating this.  It's cool to see obscure material like this come to light!


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Enokido wrote this? Oh wow, he's my idol!

I wonder why Utena acts so nonchalant when Anthy tells her she's really imprisoned by the roses, though. That's not something someone would tell a complete stranger.


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The thing I noticed is, in this early version of the script not only is it implied earlier on that Touga is dead, but it seems the other duelists are able to interact with him in spite of that instead of Utena, Anthy and Shiori being the only ones who can see him.school-sherlock

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Re: The Utena Scenario Book - an early draft of the movie script

The next part should be coming in the next day or two, but first I had a couple comments about the first one.

Riri-kins wrote:

Enokido wrote this? Oh wow, he's my idol!

Yeah, Enokido wrote a lot of Utena. And I should have made it more clear: the forward is indeed written by him specifically. He seems like a pretty cool guy, doesn't he? emot-smile

I wonder why Utena acts so nonchalant when Anthy tells her she's really imprisoned by the roses, though. That's not something someone would tell a complete stranger.

Oh, I don't know if she's nonchalant... it's just, how the heck do you respond to something like that, anyway?

teyhy wrote:

It's funny, I read the movie manga and some of the scenes are quite alike. Specially Anthy noticing Utena's ring.

As well as Anthy walking up on the dangerous fence.

RhythmFusion wrote:

The thing I noticed is, in this early version of the script not only is it implied earlier on that Touga is dead, but it seems the other duelists are able to interact with him in spite of that instead of Utena, Anthy and Shiori being the only ones who can see him. school-sherlock

Yeah, it shares that with the movie manga, too. A few other differences:

Obviously, we get a head start on the cosmological talk. I like the flashback to two generic boys dueling over Anthy, because it emphasizes the cyclical/eternal nature of the duels.

Utena sees Anthy up on the garden before she ascends to it. In the movie, she's just curious about the falling roses.

Anthy is surprised when the Sword of Dios emerges from her, while in the movie she produces it on her own initiative. That seems important.

The key visual components, like the hanging rose garden, are there from the start, but Enokido doesn't seem to have come up with the more bizarre imagery. I guess whoever was heading up the visual aspect came in later and said "you know what this classroom scene needs? Sliding chalkboards!" "Let's make the school designed by M.C. Escher!" "A garden on the roof of a building is so passe. Let's make it a huge suspended platform, instead!" I wonder if it was Ikuhara's doing. emot-rolleyes

Anthy: Saionji-sama, one isnt permitted to duel without a sword

Saionji picks up a nearby bamboo broom and throws it at Utena.

Utena:
Saionji: Any complaints now?

Interestingly, in the final version, it's Saionji who says you can't duel without a sword, and Utena who grabs the bamboo pole and asks if he has any complaints.

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Re: The Utena Scenario Book - an early draft of the movie script

Chapter 2 Part B
Le deuxiéme chapitre Partie B

O  Night - a star-filled sky
The campus is silent and empty.

O  Student Dormitories, East Building - a window
The lights are on inside the room, and we see Utena, still in her school uniform.
Before long, she closes the window and warily draws the curtains.

O  The same - inside the room
It's Utena's personal room.
She just moved in, so there are a lot of cardboard boxes and stuff lying around.
Her uniform is still torn at the chest.
While taking it off, she walks up to the closet.
She opens it.
Inside is a row of "girl's clothing."
And - a photo stand is sitting there quietly.
It's a photograph of her and Touga, "silhouetted against a starry sky."
Utena starts to get out of her uniform, but...
Just then, there's a knock at the door.

Utena: !

Utena cautiously closes the closet.

Utena: ...who is it?
Anthy's Voice: It's me. Himemiya Anthy.
Utena: ...

+

With a relaxed air, Anthy sits herself down on Utena's bed.

Anthy: (looking around the room) You just moved in, but it's already so tidy.
Utena: I was about to go to sleep, and I don't make a habit of inviting people to my room.
Anthy: (standing) Then, I guess I should leave for tonight...

Utena takes Anthy's shoulders and sits her back down on the bed.

Utena: Don't be stupid. I'm not going to let you go back yet.
Anthy: (smiling) Of course not.

Utena's hand, pressing down on Anthy's shoulder.
Utena's eye is drawn to the Rose Seal on her finger.

Utena: What is this?

Utena shows her the ring on her hand.

Anthy: It's the Seal of the Rose. You know that, don't you?
Utena: ...
Anthy: Those who possess it can participate in the duels.

Utena: That Saionji guy... he said that everyone duels because they want you.

+

Insert. Utena's flashback.
Touga, wearing the Rose Seal.

+

Utena: ...what do they do after they win you?
Anthy: (smiling) You're funny.

Anthy takes Utena's hand and looks up at her.

Anthy: Tenjou, Utena, san...
Utena: Just "Utena" is fine.
Anthy: Well... how do you do, Utena? The two of us will get along, won't we?

Anthy softly kisses the back of Utena's hand.

Utena: ...do you always do this with the winner of the duels?
Anthy: I am the Rose Bride. I do whatever the one I'm engaged to wishes.

Anthy, still sitting, takes Utena by the waist.

Anthy: You're so thin.
Utena: Cut it out!

Utena hastily pulls herself away from Anthy.
Her back bumps into the closet.
By some chance, the photo stand falls out of the open closet.
Utena snatches it up so that Anthy won't see it.
But Anthy seems more interested in the inside of the closet.

Anthy: (standing) You have so many cute clothes.
Utena: (in a bad mood) So what? Do you have a problem with that?
Anthy: Not at all.

Anthy again moves to press against Utena's body.

Utena: I said cut it out!

Not thinking, Utena shoves Anthy away.
She falls on the bed.

Utena: What were you thinking...? You're weird.
Touga's Voice: She's weird.

O  Touga's bedroom.
On the bed, Touga is talking to himself.
Next to him, Shiori is there too.

Shiori: What? Talking about the prince again?
Touga: Yes, the girl who wears the prince's clothes now... but, I'm sure she's still dreaming of the prince's castle.
Shiori: ...

On the wall next to the bed is a picture of a castle.
A big river and a boat are also drawn to the side of the castle.

Shiori: That reminds me, I used to have one myself. A prince.
Touga: Oh...?
Shiori: But he died. It was a childhood friend of mine, a girl, who killed him.

+

Insert.
Juri, as a child.

+

Shiori: The prince liked her, so when fell off a boat, he saved her but was swept away himself.
Touga: ...
Shiori: So stupid. We were supposed to be together, just the two of us, but he went missing...

The boat, painted in a western style.

Shiori: (smiling cruelly) That's why I'll never forgive her. I'll make her fill in for the prince for the rest of her life.


O  The next day. An indoor pool. The afternoon.
The pool is empty.
Utena and her classmates are in gym clothes, cleaning the bottom with scrubbing brushes.
Wakaba and some others are also messing around, spraying each other with the hose.

+

By herself, Utena walks to a water tap off to the side of the pool.
She twists open the faucet, and takes a drink.
When she lifts her head, she suddenly finds Touga beside her.

Touga: So you've also been chosen as a Duelist.
Utena: ...

Utena takes Touga's left hand and compares it to her own. No matter how she looks at it, the two Rose Seals are identical.

Utena: You said that this ring led you to this academy. Does that mean that you're also... aiming for her?
Touga: You could say that.

The two of them look at Anthy, who's in the pool, cleaning.

Utena: Why?
Touga: (jokingly) Why? Because she's charming, of course.

Anthy, using the scrub brush.

Utena: Do you know what kind of girl she is?
Touga: What kind of girl is that?
Utena: ...she's weird.
Touga; Oh?
Utena: I mean, that girl... whoever wins the duel, she'll...
Touga: What?
Utena: ...
Touga: She's the Rose Bride. Of course she'll spend the night with the one she's engaged to.
Utena: Have you ever won a duel yourself?
Touga: (a meaningful smile)
Utena: And got engaged with Himemiya, and....
Touga: (nastily) That isn't any of your business, is it?
Utena: ...
Touga: (raising his voice) Himemiya, Anthy.

Anthy turns their direction when she's called.
Touga gestures for her to come over.

+

Anthy comes to them.

Anthy: (to Utena): What shall we do tonight?
Utena: ...I told you last night. I have no use for the Rose Bride.
Anthy: Really?
Touga: (still looking at Utena, but to Anthy) What a cold prince. And after she went to all the trouble of winning you.
Anthy: Indeed.
Utena: ...

Suddenly, Anthy is showered with water.

Anthy: (smiling) Aaah...!

Touga has mischievously sprayed her with a nearby hose.

Anthy: Stop it, Touga-sempai!

Anthy doesn't look altogether displeased, and seems playful.

Utena: ...

Utena, with an unreadable expression, turns away from the two of them and returns to the pool with her scrub brush.
Touga and Anthy both watch her as she goes.

...The sound of a ringing phone.

Telephone (Akio's Voice): Why did the younger sister imprison the Rose Prince...?


O  Night. Touga's bedroom.
Touga is holding the phone
Tonight, too, Shiori is beside him.

Telephone (Akio's Voice): And once she had imprisoned him, the mob stormed in...

+

The world of myth.
In a fairy-tale like image:
The younger sister is shutting her brother, the prince, into a room in a tower.
The people are pounding at the gate.

Man A: Open the door!
Woman A: Give us back the prince!
Man B: Open up, you witch!
Man A: Witch!
Woman A: Witch!

+

The Rose Prince and his younger sister are in the tower.

Akio's Voice: Yes, my sister was really a witch. She had magic powers. But there was something else, that the people didn't know...

As the younger sister watches, the prince collapses in front of her.
And his form darkens and roils.
At the same time, the sound of innumerable insects' wings can be heard.

Touga's Voice: What was that?
Akio's Voice: That the Rose Prince was really the Lord of the Flies. My sister, the witch, used her magic to make him a prince.

+

Touga's bedroom.

Telephone (Akio's Voice): So, when my sister's magic faded, the prince returned to his former self.
Touga: So you set up this game to regain the lost magic, huh...?
Shori: ...

Shiori's expression, as she's listening to Touga'