It's a bit dark, which is a problem I have sometimes myself and it can affect the colouring, but it's not by any stretch of the imagination bad.

I can tell already you have a lot of talent. How are you doing the colouring? If I were you I'd try my hand at doing it in photoshop before giving in to the urge to break out the coloured pencils. It might turn out cleaner that way. I haven't seen any of your other art, so this is a general all-purpose comment. Worry more about perfecting your own art style than trying to conform to someone else's. Most of my worst drawings I've done were fan art that I tried really hard to make look like official character art. It'll be great as long as you're comfortable with it. ;D

Yeah, it seems like you thought of all the problems in there. I just noticed a little chin muddle going on there (which tends to happen when I re-draw the chin 89 times to fit with anime style. D

But yeah. It all seems in proportion so let us see it when you're done.!

I second the use of mechanical pencils. I find it hard to go back to anything else.

Okay, it's all finished!  I made two versions...
One without backround
http://i44.photobucket.com/albums/f29/I … -1copy.jpg
And one with
http://i44.photobucket.com/albums/f29/I … ndcopy.jpg

Actually, I don't really know many gothic manga's I've enjoyed, but suggestions would be good.
Most of hte ones I've tried, the plot seemed a bit... whiny.

Thanks for your comments!  I kinda wanted Utena's outfit to be like an Evil Utena concept

Suncat wrote:

That is an intriguing costume for Utena.

Yes... It's very... intriguing...

Iris wrote:

Actually, I don't really know many gothic manga's I've enjoyed, but suggestions would be good.
Most of hte ones I've tried, the plot seemed a bit... whiny.

Thanks for your comments!  I kinda wanted Utena's outfit to be like an Evil Utena concept

Some of the gothic titles I flicked through did seem to have that whiny quality you mentioned... as for titles, the only gothic one I have as such is a manga called The Wallflower (Yamatonadeshiko Shichihenge which translates as Perfect Girl Evolution).

Its about these excessively handsome guys who in exchange for free rent at this fancy place, have to try and change a girl called Sunako who has developed an obsession with darkness and a morbid fascination with blood, horror movies, and similarly dark things, from being the scariest girl alive into a lady.  the girl in question hates excessive light exposure and for most part, she is portrayed in Super-Deformed form except for key scenes where she is drawn in all her dark glory.

The artwork on the 4 guys is pretty good and if you like glamourous Japanese guys who tend to dress in gothic bondage gear and sometimes you see Sunako and her friend Noi dressed up the same way, its the manga for you.

Sunako in her hot form


Kyohei, Yuki, Takenaga, Ranmaru with Sunako in SD form

Wow, another one of my really old threads resurrected.

Tamago, I did end up reading that manga.  I really love it, especially the main character, although the anime seemed to hold less charm to me.

Sharii, thankyou so much!  I wanted Akio and Anthy to look like themselves, but Utena as if she'd fully fallen to Akio's temptation.  Although from my current point of view on the series, Anthy would probably glaring at her in that scenario.  >w>
I haven't done Utena art in so long, I should!